Read the conclusion to a personal statement.(1) I’ve had some growth experiences. (2) They’ve helped me to improve my math skills. (3) Moreover, I have learned to apply these skills to designing and constructing movie sets. (4) I’m looking forward to honing my skills by working as a production assistant on a film this summer.

Sentence 1, “I’ve had some growth experiences,” is vague and does not remind readers what the personal statement was about. Revising it to restate a specific topic would make the conclusion clearer and better connect it to the experiences described. Sentence 3 adds a distinct point about applying math skills to set design, so it is not repetitive.

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