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Question 8 • English Language Arts 10

Read the sentence from Nat's essay. The first human heart transplant that was successful was performed decades ago in 1967 by the renowned South African surgeon Dr. Christiaan Barnard. Which best revises the sentence to be more concise?

Answer
A
The first human heart transplant was performed by Dr. Christiaan Barnard, a renowned surgeon in South Africa, in 1967.
B
The first human heart transplant was performed decades ago by Dr. Christiaan Barnard, a South African surgeon.
C
In 1967, South African surgeon Dr. Christiaan Barnard performed the first successful human heart transplant.
D
In 1967, successful South African surgeon Dr. Christiaan Barnard performed the first human heart transplant.

Explanation

Choice C keeps the key information—that the transplant was the first successful human heart transplant, that Dr. Christiaan Barnard performed it, and that it happened in 1967—while removing wordiness. “Decades ago” is unnecessary because the year gives the date, and “renowned” adds detail that is not needed. Choice D is less precise because “successful” describes the surgeon rather than the transplant.

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